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WAC Wiki- Comma Splice

Posted by amicnyanza on November 30, 2008

Comma Splice

Definition:

A comma splice is when two independent clauses are connected by only a comma; it causes a run-on sentence, which is unacceptable in both American and British English. There are multiple ways to correct the problem, such as using a semi-colon instead of a comma or making the second clause dependent on the first one. The two clauses can also be used to make two separate sentences, or they can be joined using a comma and a conjunction.

History:
The comma is descended from the slash mark, which was used in the 13th through 17th centuries to represent a pause. During the 16th century, the slash mark was modified to look like the comma that is used today.

Examples:

1)    Crabs are vicious creatures, they eat each other alive if they are kept in a bushel together for too long.
This sentence is a run-on because the clauses do not depend on each other. It would be acceptable to say:
•    Crabs are vicious creatures. They eat each other alive if they are kept in a bushel together for too long.
•    Crabs are vicious creatures, and they eat each other alive if they are kept in a bushel together for too long.
•    Crabs are vicious creatures; they eat each other alive if they are kept in a bushel together for too long.
It is also possible to make the second clause a subordinate clause.
•    Because crabs are vicious creatures, they eat each other alive if they are kept in a bushel together for too long.

2)    I would like to see my brother wrestle, he has the potential to be very successful.
This sentence is a run on, as well. Although the two sentences relate to one another, they are independent from each other. A comma is not sufficient punctuation to separate the clauses. It would be acceptable to say:
•    I would like to see my brother wrestle. He has the potential to be very successful.
•    I would like to see my brother wrestle because he has the potential to be very successful.
•    I would like to see my brother wrestle, for he has the potential to be very successful.
•    I would like to see my brother wrestle; he has the potential to be very successful.

3)    I came, I saw, I conquered.
There are always exceptions to the rule. This sentence is acceptable because the independent clauses are short, have the same subject, and are parallel.

Sources:
Blue, Tina. “When Is a Comma Splice NOT an Error?.” 25 Aug 2000 1 Dec 2008 <http://grammartips.homestead.com/>.
“Comma.” Wikipedia. 1 Dec 2008 <http://www.wikipedia.org>.
“Comma Splice.” Wikipedia. 1 Dec 2008 <http://www.wikipedia.org>.
Fogarty, Mignon. “Comma Splice.” Grammar Girl 4515 Mar 2007 1 Dec 2008 <http://grammar.quickanddirtytips.com/>.

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Rate of Change (Paper 4)

Posted by amicnyanza on November 21, 2008

Rate of Change
Life is affected by technology in an infinite number of ways, but everyone has a different opinion about whether those effects are positive or negative. Sven Birkerts, a critic of electronic text, wrote the novel The Gutenberg Elegies to emphasize his negative viewpoint on technology.  He states, “The rate of change, social and technological, has surpassed exponentially the gradually escalating rates of previous periods” (214).  Everyone can agree with Birkerts’ assertion that technology is advancing because they have witnessed the advent of phones, music players, television, and other electronics during their lifetime.  The Internet in itself is a huge milestone, and, less than 20 years after its introduction to the public, phones can be used to access the Internet to check email, download music, and play games.  It is obvious that technology is constantly evolving and become more advanced, but is it changing too quickly?  While many can see both sides of the argument, electronic devices play too large of a role in modern life for society to ignore them.
Technology is a powerful tool that helps society advance and become more sophisticated.  Without it, the world would be quieter and incredibly less connected.  Many people cannot even imagine what life would be like without television, phones, and computers.  These devices allow faster, more convenient communication between people who may not even live on the same continent.  Information can be transmitted from place to place at the click of a button, allowing everyone in the world access to knowledge that they would not otherwise have.  Technology is extremely influential and has helped the human race achieve many goals, from non-invasive surgery to accurate weather predictions.  In a society where people always want things bigger, better, and faster, technology is an aspect of life that most people do not want to live without.
Shelley Jackson’s Patchwork Girl demonstrates how rapidly technology has advanced in the past decade.  The Internet allows people to link to countless sites with just the click of a button and, while Patchwork Girl does this to some extent, it is much more limited than society is accustomed to.  The StorySpace program allows the user to navigate to different text boxes without having to follow the traditional line-by-line format that most novels use.  Jackson purposefully uses the program in order to try to intrigue the reader and give him/her a different type of reading experience.  Instead, its non-linear format confuses the audience and leaves them with no true sense of what the story is about.  While it may have been an exciting program to use when it first came out, those who utilize it now deem it limiting because they are so familiar with the Internet.  It is quite frustrating to read and comprehend because technology has progressed so much since it was published.  Still, many readers would rather read hypertext like Patchwork Girl as opposed to a traditional book because it is closer to the style of text that they are familiar with.  Even though Jackson’s text is somewhat limited in comparison to modern technologies such as the Internet, it is more interactive than reading a conventional novel page by page.
While many people adore hypertext, the Internet, and electronic devices, there are still a select few, like Birkerts, who are strongly opposed to society’s increasing dependence on technology.  There is a piece of technology to achieve almost any goal, and as long as there is access to that technology, people would rather use it than do things the old-fashioned way.  Birkerts is not keen on society’s dependence and believes that people are “wiring [themselves] into a gigantic hive” (219).  His point is valid in the sense that life is affected by technology is every aspect, whether it affects one’s everyday tasks, professional life, or social life.  However, what is wrong with taking the easy way out?  Math would be a million times harder without calculators; researching and writing papers for school would take much longer without computers.  Technological advancements occur continually, and there is a “steady displacement of old by new, a generational pressure that escalates, its momentum gathers and the members of the old dispensation age and die off” (214).  All new devices are improvements upon a previous idea or tool, making it easy for society to adapt to using the new appliance to replace an old one.  The only issue with newer and better products coming out is that the old products become useless.  For example, Apple has come out with the iPhone, a device that allows the user to listen to music, place phone calls, check email, and access the Internet.  Unfortunately, like Patchwork Girl and the StorySpace program, people who have the iPhone no longer have any use for their old, less sophisticated phones and music players.  StorySpace is an obsolete program just 13 years after it was published, thus causing the reader to wonder about its relevance in today’s society.
In a society that constantly craves more, there is no time for old, outdated technology.  Birkerts believes that things are progressing too quickly, as demonstrated by Patchwork Girl and the StorySpace program.  New technology builds upon old devices, causing the old tools to become obsolete.  The world is becoming more sophisticated with each passing day, but most people believe that the changes are positive.  Technology gives us access to information and the ability to achieve goals that we would not be able to reach otherwise.  As long as there is currently a machine to complete the task, there is no need for the old machine.

Works Cited:
Birkerts, Sven. The Gutenberg Elegies. New York: Faber and Faber, Inc., 1994.

Self Evaluation:
I believe that I took a unique approach to this paper.  I was having issues with organizing my thoughts, but I think I really pulled it off in terms of clarity.  I am extremely satisfied with this paper and my argument sounds put-together and mature when you read it out loud! ;-)

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Writing Project 3- Final Draft: Creativity and Sound

Posted by amicnyanza on October 24, 2008

Creativity and Sound

Creativity is an imperative component of all enjoyable films and novels because it engages the audience.  The human imagination is limitless, and no two people think in exactly the same manner.  Everyone has different ideas, morals, and experiences, causing each individual to interpret text in a manner that is unique to his own self.  The author of a novel inserts his own ingenuity into the novel when he writes it.  The reader then creates a distinct picture in his head and sometimes infers unwritten aspects of the story with a bit of prompting from the author.  What happens when one of those readers decides to create a film that conveys his personal interpretation of the story?  How can he get the audience to agree with his point of view?  In the film version of Mary Shelley’s Frankenstein, the director attempts to convey unusual concepts about the original novel to the viewers by way of sound, a technique that is exclusive to the film version of the text.

While immersed in a novel, the reader develops his own idea of what the setting and characters look like.  Imagination plays an important role in the way the story is interpreted.  Although everyone who reads Mary Shelley’s Frankenstein is looking at the same words on the same pages, each person interprets the story in a different way.  While some may believe the book focuses on Victor and Elizabeth’s relationship, others think that it is mainly about the monster’s loneliness and seclusion; neither is wrong. When watching a movie, the entire audience is seeing and hearing the exact same thing.  There are intentional details that are placed in film that are meant to evoke certain emotions from the audience. Interpretation of film may be somewhat different for each individual, but it is much more uniform than a novel’s interpretation.  However, it becomes difficult for the audience to fully enjoy the story when it is converted to film because the director has creative input and changes certain aspects to make it better for the public.


Frankenstein
looks at the storyline from the director’s perspective; it is one unique approach to the novel that the director wants everyone else to understand.   He has a distinct vision of the creation scene that he enhances using music and sound.  The soundtrack dramatizes the scene and enhances the audience’s reaction to the text.  Dramatic, orchestral music plays while Victor Frankenstein flips a series of switches and pushes the monster’s lifeless body around the room and into a large basin of amniotic fluid.  A variety of loud, energetic instruments continue to play while he sticks needles into the monster’s body, and the crackling of electricity is prominent as the scene comes to a climax.  Victor becomes excited because he thinks he has given the creature life, but there is silence when he looks in the basin and sees no movement.  Victor stares in silence at the seemingly lifeless monster through a small window, disappointed that he has wasted years of his life for nothing.  The camera is aimed at the window as Victor walks away, and a startling clash of symbols sounds as the monster’s hand hits the window.  Victor cries, “It’s alive,” and trumpets flare to convey the drama of the scene as the monster flings itself out of the amniotic fluid.  The director deliberately uses dramatic music and abrupt, loud sounds in the creation scene to persuade the audience to feel a certain way.  The viewers are not allowed to have creative input in the scene, a negative aspect of film that novel-readers do not enjoy.
When talking about text, it is very common to hear that the original novel is better than the movie; Frankenstein is an accurate example of this assertion.  Creativity is one of the most enjoyable parts in reading a novel, but that is taken away when viewing the film.  Music is used to intensify the viewer’s reaction to the film and is usually successful in making the audience feel a certain way; however, creativity, along with enjoyment, is subtracted from the equation.  So, did the director of Frankenstein get the audience to see the text from his abstract point of view?  Film makes people come to similar conclusions, so yes, he did achieve his goal, but he did so at the expense of the audience’s satisfaction.

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